11A Citizenship: Voter Turnout Feedback

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Question:
Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Marks:
6 marks

Average Grade:
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4226- Candidate: N/A - Grade: 6/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

One reason why it is important is because of representation.Excellent. You immediately use a key specialist term. Higher turnout leads to a more accurate representation of the will of the people.Perfect explanation of the term. When more people participate, elected officials are more likely to reflect the views and interests of the entire population.This is a clear and sophisticated explanation of the link between turnout and representative democracy. Another reason is legitimacy.A second, distinct and equally important key term. This shows excellent knowledge. A government that is elected with a higher voter turnout is seen as more legitimate and authoritative.Perfect. You have clearly and concisely explained two different, high-level reasons.

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✅ Strengths

Excellent use of two distinct key terms: 'representation' and 'legitimacy'.
Your explanations are clear, concise, and accurate.
The structure of your answer is perfect, with two well-defined points.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

No improvements needed for full marks.
To challenge yourself further, you could add a specific example to support each point.

Next Steps: This is an exemplary answer. Continue to use this structure (Point > Explain) and these key terms in your other answers.

Grade: 6/6 marks - A perfect, concise, and analytical answer.

4214- Candidate: N/A - Grade: 6/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

It's important to have a high voting turnout because a low voting turnout could undermine the purpose of democracy.A superb start, framing the issue in terms of a threat to democracy. which means that there's not an accurate perscription on what the people want.Good explanation. 'Prescription' is an interesting word choice, but the meaning of 'accurate picture' is clear. In addition to this, a government with a high voting turnout is seen as responsible and authoritative.Excellent point. You are describing the concept of 'legitimacy' and 'mandate' perfectly. Higher turnout results that there is a more diverse range of perspective and experience are represented.A final, excellent point on representation and diversity of views.

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✅ Strengths

You make multiple, distinct, high-level points (undermining democracy, legitimacy, representation).
Your explanations are clear and analytical.
The language you use ('authoritative', 'diverse range of perspective') is sophisticated.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

This is a full-mark answer with no significant weaknesses.
You could add a specific, real-world example to make it even stronger.

Next Steps: Fantastic work. Continue to explain multiple distinct points in your answers to ensure you always hit the top marks.

Grade: 6/6 marks - A sophisticated answer with several well-explained points.

4118 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 6/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

One reason why it is important to have high voter turnouts is because to insure that democracy is not undermined.Excellent opening point, showing high-level understanding. This means that with a high voter turnout more people vote for who represents the country compared to a low turnout.A clear explanation of representation. Another reason why it is important is so that more minority parties are recognised politically.This is a very insightful and sophisticated point that many students miss. A final reason is that a high voter turnout ensures and discourages voters apathy in the younger generation.Another excellent point, linking turnout to the civic health of future generations.

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✅ Strengths

You make three distinct, clear, and sophisticated points (representation, minority recognition, voter apathy).
Your understanding of the concepts is excellent.
The answer is well-structured and easy to follow.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

Excellent work. You could develop each point with an example, but for a 6-mark question, this is already more than enough for full marks.

Next Steps: Keep applying this 'three-point' structure to your answers. It's a very effective way to show the depth of your knowledge.

Grade: 6/6 marks - A comprehensive and sophisticated answer.

4237 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 6/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

It is important because a democracy wouldn't be truly fully representative if only half or less of the voter base voted.A perfect start that immediately links turnout to the core concept of representation. Democracy means rule of many so if a few people vote it isn't truly the rule of many.Excellent, clear definition and explanation. if an election... the total voterbase did not vote and only half did, untimately the ruling governent could not have a popular majority.This is a fantastic point. You've correctly identified that a government can win an election without having the support of the majority of the population if turnout is low. People who don't vote... are vulnerable to populist politicians... One such example... is Nigel Farage...This is a superb, high-level point linking low turnout and political disengagement to the rise of populism, supported by a specific, contemporary example.

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✅ Strengths

Sophisticated understanding of democracy, representation, and 'popular majority'.
Your point linking low engagement to vulnerability to populism is A-Level standard.
Excellent use of a specific, relevant example (Nigel Farage).
Very well-written and analytical throughout.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

There are no weaknesses in this answer. It is exemplary.

Next Steps: This is an outstanding piece of work. Continue to apply this level of critical thinking and use of contemporary examples in all your essays.

Grade: 6/6 marks - An exemplary, sophisticated, and analytical response.

4349 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 6/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

It is important to have high voter turnout because it means that a majority of the country care about what happens in their country.A strong opening that connects turnout to civic engagement. This is a strong point as it values the importance of a democratic country.Good link to the core concept of democracy. If there was a low voter turnout, there could be extremist parties going into power. For example, Hitler's Nazi party (NDSAP).This is a powerful and valid historical example. You are correctly arguing that low turnout and apathy can create a vacuum that allows extremist groups to seize power. Additionally, a high voter turnout means that a lot of the society is integrated/included with politics, which creates a strong, influential government.An excellent second point that links high turnout to an 'integrated' society and a government with a strong mandate.

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✅ Strengths

You make two distinct, high-level points (preventing extremism, creating an integrated society).
Your use of a major historical example (the Nazi party) is powerful and effective.
You have a clear understanding of the wider social and political importance of high turnout.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

Fantastic work. There are no weaknesses in this response.

Next Steps: This is an excellent, well-supported answer. Continue to use powerful, specific examples to make your arguments as convincing as this one.

Grade: 6/6 marks - A powerful, analytical answer with a very effective historical example.

4310 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 5/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

It is very important to have a voter turnout because a low voting turnout could undermine the purpose of democracy, as it means that not a accurate perception on what people want.A very strong start. You have clearly identified the link between low turnout and undermining democracy, and you've explained it well. In addition to those a government with a high voting turnout is seen as responsible and authoritive.An excellent second point. This is the concept of 'legitimacy' - a government is seen as having the right to rule. Higher turnout results that there is more divers range.A good final point about the result reflecting a more diverse range of views, but this could be explained a little more fully.

Detailed Feedback

✅ Strengths

You make several distinct and sophisticated points.
You clearly understand concepts like democracy, representation, and authority.
Your answer is well-structured and easy to follow.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

Your final point about a 'diverse range' is good but could be explained a little more clearly to ensure you get full marks every time.

Next Steps: This is a very strong answer. To make it even better, make sure you fully explain every point you make. For your final point, you could add: "...a more diverse range of views are represented, so the government has to listen to young and old, rich and poor."

Grade: 5/6 marks - A very strong answer with multiple, well-understood points.

4212 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 5/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

One reason why it is important to have a high voter turnout is so democracy isn't undermined.Excellent, high-level opening. This is because if there is a low voter turnout the party with the majority would actually have more people who didn't vote for that party than did.This is a fantastic and very clear explanation of how a government can lack a 'popular mandate' even if they win the election. Another reason it important to have a high voter turnout is so to make a Coalition government less likely.This is a very interesting and sophisticated point. You are arguing that high turnout can lead to more decisive results and stronger governments. This is because if more people vote a majority is more likely to be shown.Good explanation of your point.

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✅ Strengths

You make two very clear and sophisticated points (mandate and coalition governments).
Your explanation of the 'popular mandate' is particularly impressive and well-phrased.
The answer is well-structured and analytical.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

Excellent work. To elevate it even further, you could include a specific, real-world example to illustrate one of your points.

Next Steps: This is a top-level answer. To improve further, think about which recent UK elections have resulted in coalitions or small majorities, and consider how voter turnout might have played a role.

Grade: 5/6 marks - A very strong, analytical answer with sophisticated points.

4328 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 4/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

It is important to have a high voter turnout because it means a lot of people or even more than half the people that are eligable to vote do vote.Good - you have started with a clear definition. Therefore more voices are being heard and get to choose what they want.This is a clear point about representation. It also means that a majority amount of the people get who they vote for.A good point about the result reflecting the majority view. It also ensures no Coalitions occur which can sometimes cause vssues for the public.This is a sophisticated point, but you haven't explained it. Why are coalitions an issue? How does high turnout prevent them? It also means less people will take their opinions online to share their opinions.This is an interesting idea but it is not explained and is less relevant than your other points.

Note: You make some really good points, especially about coalitions. To get more marks, you need to explain that point more fully.

Improved Section:

High turnout can make a coalition government less likely by delivering a clearer, more decisive resultThis explains the mechanism., which can lead to a stronger and more stable governmentThis explains the positive outcome..

Detailed Feedback

✅ Strengths

You make several clear and relevant points about representation and majority rule.
You have identified a sophisticated point about coalition governments.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

You need to explain your more complex points (like coalitions) more fully.
The final point about sharing opinions online is weak and distracts from the stronger parts of your answer.

Next Steps: Focus on quality over quantity. It's better to have two points that are very well-explained than five points that are underdeveloped. Always explain *why*.

Grade: 4/6 marks - A good answer with several relevant points, but lacks explanation on the more complex ideas.

4267 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 4/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

One reason why it is important to have a high turnout is to have democracy so everyone can have a political view.A good starting point linking turnout to the core concept of democracy. This is because people vote to have better services to rely on so if more people vote Government have a better understanding of what civilians need to be provided with.This is a very good and practical explanation. You've clearly linked high turnout to the government's ability to meet people's needs. with a higher voter turnout younger people have more political view and opinion to change their Quality of Life.This is a good idea but isn't as clearly explained as your first point. You're right that it helps younger people, but the key is that it makes the government listen to them.

Note: Your point about the government understanding people's needs is excellent. Here is how you could improve your second point about young people to make it just as clear.

Improved Section:

A higher voter turnout, especially among younger people, forces the government to create policies that benefit themThis is a more direct explanation of the outcome., ensuring their quality of life is not ignoredThis clearly states the positive result..

Detailed Feedback

✅ Strengths

You make a very clear, well-explained point about turnout helping the government understand what services people need.
You link turnout to the important concept of democracy.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

Your second point about young people could be explained more clearly.
Try to structure your answer into two separate paragraphs to keep your ideas distinct.

Next Steps: You have great ideas. Focus on fully explaining one point before moving to the next. Using phrases like "This means that..." can help you develop your explanations.

Grade: 4/6 marks - A strong answer with one very well-explained practical point.

4173 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 4/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

One reason as to why it is important to have a high voter turnout is so we can get the feedback from majority of the population and create the image of what they would want for the future of where they live.A good point, clearly explained. You are describing the concept of representation. Another reason it is important is so the government know that everyone who is eligible to vote takes advantage of that and helps contribute to the final turnout instead of it being divided.This is a good point about civic duty and participation. For example if majority of the votes were from the older generation the government would think that the younger generation dont care and would focus their manifesto on benefiting the older generation.This is an excellent example, but it belongs with your first point about representation, not your second point about civic duty.

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✅ Strengths

You make two clear and valid points about representation and civic duty.
Your example about the older vs younger generation is excellent and shows good understanding.
The answer is well-written.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

Your example needs to be better linked to the point it is supposed to be supporting. It supports your first point, but you placed it after your second.
Make sure your structure is logical: Point 1, Example for Point 1. Point 2, Example for Point 2.

Next Steps: Plan your answer structure before you start writing. A simple P.E.E. (Point, Evidence, Explain) structure for each paragraph will ensure your examples are always linked to the right point.

Grade: 4/6 marks - A good answer with strong ideas and a great example, but the structure is slightly muddled.

4150 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 4/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

Its important to have high voter turnout because if less than 50% of the country actually vote it wont be clear which party the majority of the country want in power.This is an excellent point. You have clearly and accurately explained the problem of a government being elected without a majority of public support. This could lead to many people questioning if the government political party in power.A perfect explanation of the consequence. This 'questioning' is the core idea of a government lacking 'legitimacy'.

Note: Your point is very strong. To elevate it to the top marks, you could use the correct key term for this idea.

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This could lead to many people questioning the legitimacy of the government'Legitimacy' is the specific term for the belief that a government has the right to rule., making it harder for them to govern effectively.

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✅ Strengths

You make one very strong, clear, and well-explained point.
You correctly identify the problem of a party winning with support from less than half the population.
Your logic is very easy to follow.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

You have one excellent point. To get full marks, you need to add a second, distinct point.
For example, you could also discuss how low turnout can mean certain groups (like the young) are ignored.

Next Steps: You have a perfect understanding of legitimacy. Now, learn about 'representation'. This will give you two powerful, distinct points to make in your answers.

Grade: 4/6 marks - An excellent single point, clearly explained. Needs a second point for more marks.

4199 UA - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 4/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

one reason why it is important to have high vote turnout is it helps with democracy. for example if there's a low turnout it would undermine democracy.A good start, identifying the link to democracy. Another reason why it is important to have a high vote turnout is due to the percentage of people eligable to vote and who actually vote.You are providing a good definition of turnout here. A low turnout can create low representation.This is a perfect point, but it needs to be explained! What is 'low representation' and why is it a problem? for example if there were around 100,000 people who are assigned on the electoral register and only 35,000 actually vote the turnout is low 35% and is a disadvantage for the older and younger generations.This is a great example using numbers, but again, you need to explain WHY it is a disadvantage.

Note: You have all the right ideas and a great example. You just need to explain your points more fully.

Improved Section:

A low turnout of 35% is a disadvantage because it means the government's policies might only reflect the views of that small groupThis explains what representation means., ignoring the needs of the 65% of people who did not voteThis explains why it is a problem..

Detailed Feedback

✅ Strengths

You use key terms correctly (democracy, representation).
You have a good grasp of the definition of turnout.
Your use of a numerical example is a great way to make your point.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

You must explain your points. You state that low turnout creates low representation, but you don't explain what that means or why it's a problem.

Next Steps: Every time you make a point, add a sentence that starts with "This is a problem because...". This will force you to develop your explanation and earn more marks.

Grade: 4/6 marks - Contains all the right ingredients for a top answer but lacks explanation.

4225 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 4/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

It is important to have high voter turn-out so everyone could be represented better in society.Excellent start using the key term 'represented'. For example, you have a specific number of people who can vote - which do vote. If only 20 out of 100 people vote you would have a low voter turnout and you might not get the representatives you want to represent you or the country.A good, clear example that explains the concept of representation well. It is good to encourage everyone to vote... This is important as you would have a huge majority of people acting and the right political party should be elected.This part of the answer is weaker. There is no single 'right' political party, and democracy is about choosing between different options.

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✅ Strengths

You have a very good understanding of representation.
Your example using numbers (20 out of 100) is clear and effective.
The first half of your answer is very strong.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

The second half of your answer is weaker and shows some confusion about the purpose of democracy.
The idea of a single 'right' party is incorrect. It's better to talk about the 'will of the people' or the 'majority view'.

Next Steps: Focus on your excellent first point about representation. Instead of trying to add a second, weaker point, you could just develop the first one with more detail to secure more marks.

Grade: 4/6 marks - A very strong explanation of representation is slightly undermined by a weaker second point.

4274 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 4/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

It's important to have a high voter turnout as it represents how many individuals want a change with the rules or governement.A good point, linking turnout to the desire for change. If the issue is popular, more people will have a concern for it which presents those people with an opportunity to display their thoughts and opinions.This is a good explanation of why turnout can be higher for certain issues. This is highly important as the government desires a high voter turnout just to ensure that the public has expressed their desires which would mean that preayone would be content or happy with how the country made a decision.This is a good idea, but the word choice is a little weak. 'Content or happy' could be replaced with a stronger idea like 'accept the legitimacy of the result'.

Note: You have a strong argument. Using more precise, academic language can make it even better.

Improved Section:

This ensures the public has expressed their desires, which means more people are likely to accept the legitimacy of the outcome'Legitimacy' is the key term for accepting that a result is fair and should be followed., even if they personally disagree with it.

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✅ Strengths

You have a clear understanding of how turnout reflects public opinion and the desire for change.
Your points are logical and well-structured.
You are thinking about the emotional response of the public to an election result.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

Try to use more formal, academic language. Instead of 'happy', think about words like 'legitimacy', 'consent', or 'mandate'.
The answer contains one main idea developed in several ways. Try to include a second distinct point.

Next Steps: Create a list of key terms for this topic (e.g., Representation, Legitimacy, Mandate, Apathy, Participation) and practice using them in your answers.

Grade: 4/6 marks - A good, well-explained answer that needs more precise terminology.

4314 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 4/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

A high voter turnout means... that... people are using their rights to vote to make the country more democratic and involved.A good point linking high turnout to rights and democratic participation. Also, a higher voter turnout can improve quality of life and feel like your voice is being heard.Another good point about personal empowerment and real-world outcomes. A high voter turnout in terms of the younger generation they dictate the future through their votes.This is a good idea, but the sentence is not clearly structured. for the elder generation, elders can help themselves by voting for a policieel partie that ensure free and accessible healthcare.This is a good example of why voting is important, but it doesn't directly explain why a HIGH TURNOUT specifically is important.

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✅ Strengths

You make several clear, relevant points about rights, democracy and participation.
You are thinking about the impact of voting on different generations.
You link voting to tangible outcomes like healthcare.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

Your answer explains why voting is important, but not always why HIGH TURNOUT is important.
Your sentence structure could be clearer. Try to write shorter, more focused sentences.

Next Steps: Always focus on the exact question. For this question, you need to explain the importance of the *percentage* of voters being high. How is an election with 90% turnout different from one with 30% turnout?

Grade: 4/6 marks - A good answer about the importance of voting, but needs to focus more on 'high turnout'.

4268 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 3/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

One Reason why its important to have a high voter turnout its so you can see what the country votes.A simple but clear point about representation. having a majority means that allot of people in the country voted for him meanwhile having a low voter turnout means majoritys can win with less than 30% of the country voting for them.This is a good idea, but the numbers are a little confused. A party can't win with less than 30% if they are the majority. The point you are trying to make is that a party could win with only 30% of the *electorate's* support if turnout is low. another Reason why high voter turnout is neccesary is to make sure corruption does not happen a high voter turnant means that extremist parties dont win.These are two interesting but unexplained points. How does high turnout prevent corruption or stop extremists?

Note: You have some excellent ideas, but they need to be explained more clearly. Here is how you could improve your point about extremists.

Improved Section:

A high voter turnout helps prevent extremist parties from winning because it shows that the mainstream, moderate majority of the population is engagedThis explains the mechanism., leaving less space for radical groups with little supportThis explains the outcome..

Detailed Feedback

✅ Strengths

You have identified several good ideas: representation, legitimacy, and preventing extremism.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

Your explanations are confused and unclear, especially when you use numbers.
You need to explain the link between your point and the outcome (e.g., HOW does high turnout stop extremists?).
The answer is poorly organized and jumps between different ideas.

Next Steps: Choose one of your ideas and focus on explaining it as clearly as you can in one paragraph. Don't worry about including lots of different points. Clarity is key.

Grade: 3/6 marks - Contains good ideas but they are poorly explained and organised.

4143 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 3/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

It is important to have a high voter turnout because it gives the political parties a better understanding when a certain group of people vote for a specific political party.This is a good point about parties learning from results. This helps political parties understand the morals of most voter and try to align their next manifesto with those morals to potentially win next election.A clear explanation of your point. If there is a high voter turnout it might encourage more younger people to vote once they become eligible, further increasing the voter turnout.This is a reasonable idea but it's not a primary reason why turnout is important for the country as a whole.

Detailed Feedback

✅ Strengths

You make a clear and well-explained point about how turnout provides information to political parties.
The answer is well-written and easy to understand.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

Your answer focuses on the benefits to political parties, rather than the benefits to the country's democratic system.
The second point about encouraging young people is quite weak.
You need to explain the importance in terms of representation and legitimacy.

Next Steps: Try to think bigger. How does high turnout benefit the whole of society, not just the political parties? Focus on the fairness of the result and the authority of the winner.

Grade: 3/6 marks - A clear answer, but it focuses on a less important aspect of the question.

4290 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 3/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

It is important to have a high voter turnout to increase the chances of one party winning over the other party.This is a misunderstanding. High turnout means many people from the public vote; it doesn't automatically help one specific party. Also older ages are more likely going to vote than younger due to the fact that they benefit more so younger ages need to be influenced into voting for a higher voter turnout.This is a good point. You've correctly identified that different age groups vote at different rates. it also demonstrates democracy in the country instead of a dictatorship.A simple but valid point connecting voting to the type of political system.

Detailed Feedback

✅ Strengths

You make a good point about the difference in turnout between older and younger people.
You correctly link voting to the concept of democracy.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

Your opening point is based on a misunderstanding of what 'voter turnout' means.
Your points are not well explained. You state them but don't say why they are important.
The answer is a list of points rather than a developed explanation.

Next Steps: Focus on explaining one of your good points fully. For example, explain WHY it is a problem that older people vote more than younger people. What is the consequence of this?

Grade: 3/6 marks - Contains some relevant points but also a key misunderstanding, and lacks explanation.

4300 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 3/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

It is important to have a high voters turnout as this means that the majority of registered voters have voted.A good, clear definition to start your answer. This is good because it strengthens the sense of democracy in England.A valid point, linking turnout to the health of democracy. meaning that the people, the public live based on what they voted for.This part of the explanation is quite confused and unclear. The result of this is that less people will complain over the winning party because they had voted for them.This is a good idea - you're talking about accepting the result. But your phrasing is a bit simplistic.

Note: Your idea about people complaining less is a good one. Here is how you could phrase it in a more academic way.

Improved Section:

As a result, more people will accept the legitimacy of the winning partyThis is a more precise way of saying they will 'complain less'., as the high turnout shows it was a fair and representative decisionThis explains why they accept the result..

Detailed Feedback

✅ Strengths

You start with a good definition of voter turnout.
You have a good point about how high turnout makes people accept the result.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

Your explanation is unclear in places and needs to be phrased more carefully.
You need to develop your points with more detail.

Next Steps: Plan your answer before you write. Make one point, then use a full sentence to explain it. Then make a second point and do the same. This will improve your clarity.

Grade: 3/6 marks - A decent start with a good idea, but the explanation is unclear.

4283 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 3/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

it is important to have a high voter turnout because having a low one can undermine democracy.A good start with a clear, relevant point. it is also important to have a high voter turn out so more people can voice their opinions and ideas.A second good point about representation. because the bigger higher the turnout the more vaces and better laws can be in place.This is a reasonable idea but you haven't explained the link. HOW does high turnout lead to better laws? And as age increases voter turnout also increases as elderly and people who are retired rely on government services, if people don't vote they are able to go online and give their opinion.This point is very confused and contradicts itself.

Detailed Feedback

✅ Strengths

You identify two very important reasons: supporting democracy and allowing people to voice their opinions.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

Your explanations are either missing or very confused.
You need to explain the points you make. Don't just list them.
The final part of your answer about elderly people is contradictory and unclear.

Next Steps: Focus on making one point and explaining it well. Take your first point: "low turnout can undermine democracy". Now, write a sentence explaining HOW it does this. For example: "This is because the winner may not have the support of most people."

Grade: 3/6 marks - Two good points are identified but they are not explained clearly.

4234 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 2/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

To have a high voter turnout is important because people need the government services.This is a simple but potentially relevant point. For example, if there is a low voter turnout this could undermine democracy in the country.This is a key idea, but you haven't explained HOW or WHY low turnout undermines democracy. it is important to have a too high voter turnout because it demonstrates democracy in the country which shows stability.Again, you are stating a correct idea (it shows stability) but not explaining the link. Why does it show stability?

Note: You have identified some key words like 'democracy' and 'stability'. The next step is to explain what you mean. Here is how you could explain your point about undermining democracy.

Improved Section:

A low voter turnout could undermine democracy because if the winner is chosen by only a small fraction of the populationThis explains what low turnout means., their right to rule can be seen as illegitimate or unrepresentativeThis explains the negative consequence for democracy..

Detailed Feedback

✅ Strengths

You have identified several important key terms related to the question (democracy, stability).

🔄 Areas for Improvement

You need to explain your points. You have stated correct ideas but not shown that you understand what they mean.
The answer is a series of statements rather than a developed explanation.

Next Steps: For every point you make, ask yourself "Why?". For example: "Low turnout undermines democracy." WHY? "Because it means the government doesn't represent most people." This will help you build your explanation.

Grade: 2/6 marks - The answer uses key terms but lacks any clear explanation.

4206 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 2/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

One reason why it important to have a high vote turnout is due to our democracy and voting.A relevant starting point. This is because if voter turnout is low, it would ultimately result in the undermining of our country's democracy.This is a good point, but you need to explain HOW it undermines democracy. Additionally, this leads to another issue which is a result of a low voter turnout, being the fact that a low voter turnout also make it far more likely that a party with the minority can still win.This point is confused. A party with a minority of votes cannot win. You might mean they can win with the support of only a minority of the whole population, but it is not explained clearly.

Detailed Feedback

✅ Strengths

You correctly link high turnout to the health of a democracy.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

You state points but do not explain them. Why does low turnout undermine democracy?
Your second point about a minority winning is confused and shows a misunderstanding of the electoral system.
The language is quite convoluted and hard to follow.

Next Steps: Focus on making one simple point very clearly. Start with: "High voter turnout is important for democracy." Then explain what you mean: "This is because it means the government represents the views of most people."

Grade: 2/6 marks - A relevant point is identified but not explained, and the second point is confused.

4164 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 2/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

It is important to have high voter turnout because it would show a higher represennon of what government the country has choosen.Good - you have used the key term 'representation'. For example if 200 people vote and there is 400 people only half the country made a descion.This is a good start to an example, but you don't explain why this is a problem. If out of the 200 only 25% voted for the current government only a 1/4 would of voted for the current government making it undemportaric.This part of the example is very confused with percentages and fractions and doesn't make a clear point.

Detailed Feedback

✅ Strengths

You have correctly identified the key idea of representation.
You are trying to use a numerical example to make your point.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

Your example becomes very confused and hard to follow.
You need to explain the consequences. WHY is it a problem if only half the country votes?
The word 'undemportaric' suggests you have the right idea, but you need to explain it clearly.

Next Steps: Keep your example simple. "If only 50% of people vote, the government might only be supported by 25% of the whole country. This is a problem because they don't have a strong mandate."

Grade: 2/6 marks - The key idea is there, but the explanation and example are confused.

4341 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 1/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

it's important to have a high voter turnout because the more votes you get on a particular method of showing your votes, the most likely you are to win the election.This is a misunderstanding. 'Voter turnout' is about the total percentage of people who vote, not the number of votes a single party gets. However their are some down sides. For example if you were to send your vote by mail there is some chance that it could get lost... Also if you were to vote online you could be influenced to change your vote.This is a discussion about different voting methods (mail, online). It does not answer the question about why a high turnout is important.

Detailed Feedback

✅ Strengths

You are thinking about elections and the process of voting.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

You have misunderstood the key term 'voter turnout'. This means your answer does not address the question being asked.
The answer discusses voting methods, not the importance of high participation.

Next Steps: It is essential to learn the correct definition of 'voter turnout'. It means: "the percentage of eligible voters who cast a ballot in an election". Ask yourself: why is it good for a country if 90% of people vote, compared to only 30%?

Grade: 1/6 marks - The answer misunderstands the key term 'voter turnout' and is therefore not relevant to the question.

4249 - Candidate: N/A - Grade: 1/6

Explain why it is important to have high voter turnout (6 marks)

Student Response:

It is important to have high voter turnout so that the ideals, views, belief and opinion of the voter majority is met.This is a good start, but the rest of the answer does not develop this point. If there were to be a low voter turnout the majority of that vote wouldn't be proportional to the amount of people who the government would be affecting.This is a very confused sentence that is hard to understand. Some ways to ensure we have a high voter turnout is by voting through the post... However, some problems could arise...The rest of your answer is about different ways to vote and their problems. This does not answer the question, which asks WHY high turnout is important.

Detailed Feedback

✅ Strengths

Your first sentence shows you have some understanding of the idea of representation.

🔄 Areas for Improvement

The bulk of your answer is irrelevant to the question. You have described ways to vote, not explained why high turnout is important.
Your sentences are very long and confusing.

Next Steps: Read the question very carefully. It asks "Why is it important?". Your answer should focus only on giving reasons. Take your first sentence and try to explain it in more detail.

Grade: 1/6 marks - The answer does not address the question asked.